Recount writing: Diary Extract: Apartheid- Ryan

Tuesday 7th August 1978 09:30am *

I could not believe what happend to that boy who got shot! He died in his brother's arms, it is such a sad sight to see that people getting shot! I HATE THESE WHITE FOOLS! Just because of colour, we can't go anywhere! We have to work cheap labour when they get the best jobs in the world! I really hate them!

13:05 *

We were protesting in front of the University of Cape Town, because they won't let us study engineering etc. They keep telling us we must go and work in the mines and get peanuts, then they are crazy! All of a sudden, the cops came with rubber guns and tear gas so they could chase us away. I ran as fast as I could and hid under a car. All I could see was people running away from the cops. I'm so lucky that no one got into the car and drove away,

Wednesday 8th August 1978 17:45 *

I just got up from bed and I heard that Nelson Mandela is guilty for what? These white people only think of themselves. I went to the white areas this morning to see if there is a job somewhere in the area, then this white guy came outside and said "Hey you, get out of the area you thing!" I carried on walking, and then the white guy pushed me against the wall and told me "Get out of the area or I'll call the police." I started running and went to the mines.

Dates not accurate *

Jordan Robinson's Recount Entry

Dear Diary,

It is the year 2001 and I am by the twin towers watching as people jump out if the building trying to get out of the way of the crash, the crash of the 9-11 plane, the plane that hit the Twin Towers.
Who would do such a thing? I walked past and then on the other side of the road I saw a t.v in a shop and a news reporter said that Osama Bin Laden and some of his minions did this whole thing. The reporter said that 9 suicide bombers were on 9-11 and they destroyed the twin towers. Poor people, and stupid Osama. There is about 100 fire fighters and 100 policemen.

And then I remembered, my mum and dad work in that building. I sprint to the building but I firefighter stops me and I start wandering where I can find a vent or a secret hatch into the building. I go around the side and I see about 5, 6 maybe 10 hobo's trying to light a fire. I asked them if there is another way into the building and they asked me if I have any change. So I looked around the other corner and there was a small window that was high up. So I got a nearby ladder and climbed up and smashed the window, it hurt though when I got cut by the glass. I climbed through and there was glass and smashed stuff everywhere, so I called out "mum!", "dad!". There was no response so I looked under stuff and over stuff and finally I found my parents, they quickly woke up and clearly they still were a little unconsious and when they were woken up I helped them down the ladder and we got home safe. That was my action packed day.

By Jordan

topic - fleur &danielle

In topic we are learning about ancient Rome and others.
In my group we are using Marvin and doing a PowerPoint.

thanks for reading
fl3ur, d@n1elle @nd el1

topic

research

It is hard but its all worth it~sanutep~

Recount Writing - Term 2, Week 4

Recount Writing

The purpose of recount writing is to retell an event to provide information or entertainment.

Rm17's Success Criteria for Recount Writing

1. 5ws and H need to be answered (What? Where? When? Who? Why? and How?)
2. Time order - chronological order
3. Interesting details which may be supported by language features.
4. Past tense
5. A variety of joining words - time connectives e.g. then, because, after, although
6. Focused on topic and/or contains facts about the topic
   

At the end of this week we will be writing an informative recount about an event that has had an impact on society... Watch this space!

Improving the Quality of our Writing

The original purpose of these TIS blogs was to create a way of sharing our writing and creating a wider audience. I am hoping that from now on we will be able to use this blog as a showcase for our writing. It would be helpful for us if viewers of our blog could comment constructively on our writing. For every writing topic we learn about, we always focus our writing around a success criteria. This helps us to focus on the features of that particular type of writing. Viewers could use this success criteria to comment on our writing and help us to improve our writing.

topic

in topic we started to do power points and marvin so that we can show everyone what we leared and how we leared it flure eli and danielle

from Bailey rm17


We are learning about roman topics and we are showing all of our knowledge about the subject and it was fun and cool and we learn a lot an that's my say.

Pererika room17

today we had topic we had to choose two ways to display our information we choose marvin and a power point